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Chapter Five: The Night Mary Jane…

“Hello Mary Jane…” Spider-Man, Otto Octavius, said to the red headed woman as he rose from the darkness behind her.

Shocked, MJ jumped in surprise before calming down once she saw “Peter” and sighed in relief.

“Oh thank god it’s you tiger…” Mary Jane said as she hugged “Spider-Man, shocking Otto somewhat “…I was so worried for you.”

“I just need to pretend to be Parker long enough to fool her blind. Then when the moments right, I’ll quickly dispose of her and frame that rouge clone.” Otto thought as he was essentially planning the murder of Peter’s greatest love.

“Uh Peter you still with me?” MJ asked in confusing as she let go from the embrace, bringing Otto back to reality.

“Oh um yeah…MJ, I was trying to figure out why this city is after me again.” “Peter” said in a stutter, trying to act as casual as possible to try to fool MJ.

Unfortunately, Mary Jane wasn’t buying it slightly. She can sense Spider-Man is hiding something from her. And seeing how much madness going on after the death of Osborn, she had many burning questions, but one she had to ask.

“Peter, what the hell are you doing out there?!” She demanded suddenly.

“Damn, even she seems to be getting smarter at my charade! Have to divert the subject.” Otto thought to himself. With some quick thinking he simply said “Just the usual stuff MJ…”

“Bull Peter! Hero stuff doesn’t involve what you did with Osborn, having the Avengers after you, even tearing downtown to shreds with Venom earlier today! I don’t know what’s going on you with you, but ever since Doc Ock died you’ve been…” Mary Jane suddenly stopped herself as she remembered what Carlie frantically said to her before she hung up on her:

“NO DON’T ANSWER THAT! IT’S NOT PETER IT’S-“  

Mary Jane then froze as she began to put the pieces together: How ruthless Peter was becoming, his sudden workaholic behavior at Horizon Labs, how “Dr. Octopus” was worried for people’s lives in their final battle, even the way Peter talked sounded too arrogant for Peter.

“MJ you still with me?” Otto asked, worried what was going to happen.

“Yes Spider-Man I’m still here…” Mary Jane said distantly as she lowered her head, lettering he red mane cover her eyes “… I just have one last question for you.”

“Anything MJ just ask away.” Spider-Man said, trying to hide the fear of his slowly dying masquerade.

“JUST WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!?” Mary Jane demanded in anger and sadness.

Meanwhile a few miles away, Scarlet Spider  frantically web swung his way to Mary Jane’s home, using his genetic memory to lead the way.

“Dammit!” Kaine cursed in his mind “I’ve should’ve known that son of a bitch would go after MJ!”

Scarlet Spider was having a firestorm of emotions as he raced his way through the city. The reason for this was what was his priorities should be: Save Mary Jane, stop Otto and take him to that future Spider-Man so he can somehow resurrect Peter, or simply kill Otto so he couldn’t use Peter’s body for his own gain.

On one hand, his inherited affection for the red head was driving him to her to begin with and to save her. One the other hand, if he gets there much quicker, he can both save MJ and defeat Otto so they can get the plan in motion. And finally, if simply killed Otto, like he did when he was a murderer, he can get avenge Peter on his own terms and simply get out of dodge. But that will only be a very last resort.

“What the hell do I do!?” Scarlet Spider thought to himself “I hate to say it, but I need to think like Peter.”

Back at Mary Jane’s apartment, Otto was nearly horrified that MJ has truly seen his veil of lies.

Desperate he simply asked ‘What do you mean MJ? It’s just me, Peter, the one who save you countless times and has been the hero in your life.”

“Sorry to disappoint, but the real Peter calls me Mary Jane when things get heated, Otto.” Mary Jane growled as she slow grabbed something from her purse.

Angered by the fact Mary Jane found out who he truly is and is now a threat to his plans, Octavius rushed towards her as he yelled “Smarter than the average damsel! I guess I won’t end you nice and…”

Suddenly Mary Jane grabbed a taser gun and shot it at Spider-Man, causing Otto to collapse and yell in pain.

“What did you do to Peter you son of a bitch!” Mary Jane yelled as she pulled the trigger, shocking Spider-Man even more “Tell me before I ack!”

Otto suddenly got up and grabbed Mary Jane by the throat and knocked the tase from her hand.

“I was going to let you die painlessly so you can aid my plans of a superior world with the influence of Parker.” Otto growled.

Mary Jane simply responded by spitting on the exposed part of Spider-Man’s mask and hissed “Go…To…Hell!”

“Sorry my dear, but don’t worry…” Otto sinisterly said as he was going to form a fist “…you can both aid me in framing the Parker clone and can join Peter in the afterlife.”

Not long after Scarlet Spider made it to the apartment building and rushed his way to Mary Jane’s residence as he broke the door down and yelled “MARY JANE!? IT’S ME KAINE! ARE YOU OKAY…” But what he saw next even horrified Kaine himself.

He saw MJ, blood and bruised with a black eye and several cuts all over her body. He was held at the throat by Otto as he broke the window that leads to a several story drop.

“Kaine…” Mary Jane wheezed in pain.

“Kaine?! I wondered why this specific clone was so familiar! You’re the one who killed me as Otto Octavius and now I can enjoy framing you for the death of the wretch even more!” Octavius said in a mad hybrid of anger and delight.

“Octavius…” Scarlet Spider growled as he let his claws slide from his wrists as he was ready to kill the body snatcher “Let her go right now before I f*cking rip your head off!”

Otto simply grinned sinisterly as he calmly said “Very poor choice of words.” And simply let go of a now unconscious Mary Jane.

“Noooooo!” Kaine yelled in fear as he rushed to save Mary Jane before he was pinned against the wall by Otto.

“It’s too late now! Soon in a few moments she’ll die of the fall and I will be closer of achieving a Peter-less world! A SUPERIOR WORLD!” Octavius said in triumph as Kaine was helpless as he saw Mary Jane plummet closer to the pavement below.

To be continued.
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Mary Jane finally realized Spider-Man is Otto Octavius and even tried to take action. But this could lead the disaster as she fell into Otto's plan as Octavius viscously attacked her and just when Scarlet Spider came to her aid, Otto let her drop to her doom. Can Kaine save Mary Jane before one of Peter's greatest aspects die, or will she die along with her love, and where are the other Spiders? Stay tune for more as MJ's fate will be revealed and comment below on how this chapter is.
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Spiderdude10 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is amazing :spidey: 
keep up the great work
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blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks! :D
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Spiderdude10 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no prob keep it up
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EarthCenturion Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
EMH Spider-Man: - Clenching his fists in anger while containing the darkness in him. - Oooh, just wait till I... I...!!! - Tries to calm down. - Sorry about that... there's this "side" of me I can't seem to control at all.
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blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Let me guess, symbiote?
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:iconearthcenturion:
EarthCenturion Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
EMH Spider-Man: Close... Ever heard of Man-Spider...?
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
...Crap o_0
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:iconearthcenturion:
EarthCenturion Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
EMH Spider-Man: I know... and it's inside me. Somehow...
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
If only the Anti-Venom symbiote wasn't destroyed...
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:iconearthcenturion:
EarthCenturion Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
EMH Spider-Man: Anti-Venom, huh? Could've been a lot useful.
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Super-Metal-Sonic Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
with each chapter this story gets more and more exciting
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks! I'm glad my fanfic is getting better and better :D
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Super-Metal-Sonic Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
no problem :D
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MASTER-OF-SUPRISE Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
You did a very good job of keeping them in character. I hope MJ will be all right. Keep up the good work.
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks! And if you want to find out MJ's, you'll have to wait for the next chapter to find out ;)
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MASTER-OF-SUPRISE Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
That's what I can't wait for.
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Yep, also what aspects you like in this chapter (because this was one of the hardest to pull off so far)
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MASTER-OF-SUPRISE Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
A lot but my favorite is how no one is holding the idiot ball.
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Yep, and that's one of my main complaints about the Superior books, everyone seems to be completely ignorant about Spider-Ock so I actually made them smart in this fanfic
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MASTER-OF-SUPRISE Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
Thank you for that. It's about damn time.
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blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I KNOW RIGHT! But at least Carlie is being proactive in Superior.
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SilverSpider4014 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013

AAAAAAAAAAAH! SUSPENSE! I'M MELTING!!!!!!!

 

(Seriously though, good chapter.)

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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks :D

What do you like in this chapter?
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SilverSpider4014 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013

Seeing Scarlet Spider's aggressive attitude is humorous, I don't know what it is but he just cracks me up, probably cause I never expect Peter (or a clone Peter at least) swear and act rude.

 

I was also a bit scared when Otto spoke with 'a mad hybrid of anger and delight'. I was like "What the hell is wrong with you?" XD

 

I know I'm weird for finding the behaviour of these to funny but I still like the tense atmosphere.

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blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Hey it's cool but with Otto's madness, one of the main themes in this fanfic is that arrogance always leads to downfall
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SilverSpider4014 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
Well, it is your story so you know what's best! I look forward to see if MJ survives or not. MWHAHAHAHAHA!
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Hey don't give up on MJ just yet, there's two other Spiders going up against Otto ;)
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SpiderTrekfan616 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Will Kaine Save Mary Jane, Find out in the next chapter of "The Inferior Spider-Man":D
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Yep, I kinda took elements from the old serials from the heyday of film :D
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Hyperion720 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
nice story do more!
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Oh there will be more ;)

Also what do you like about this chapter?
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:iconhyperion720:
Hyperion720 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
When Otto was pretending to be peter in order to kill Mary Jane, pretty clever. 
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah, and to be honest, it was pretty hard to pull off when writting that part of the chapter.
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:iconhyperion720:
Hyperion720 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yeah writing can be tricky at times, but you did a god job. 
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks :D
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AraghenXD Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Digital Artist
:stare: ....this is be-a-utiful....
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I see you like it :D (Big Grin) 
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:iconaraghenxd:
AraghenXD Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Digital Artist
HOW CAN YA NOT?!
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist

Hey I just wanted to make a good story and it seems I'm doing something right :D (Big Grin) 

 

Also what do you like about this chapter?

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AraghenXD Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Digital Artist
:D

MJ finally figuring out "Peter's" deception.
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blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks! Yeah I feel that the supporting cast of Superior should be smater to see how full of crap Otto is so I wanted them all (especially MJ) smarter to see the veil of lies :D
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AraghenXD Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Digital Artist
You know they'll eventually figure it out in the comics. Callie(?) is already.
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:iconblacksuitchris:
blacksuitchris Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
And that actually made me like her more as she's actually proactive in the series and you can see how I portrayed her in the fanfic somewhat
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